2) So my peers suggested that I show more passion in my pitch and that I work on my hook. Personally, I wanted to work more on describing my product using numbers and examples that people could understand. I think all of the comments were super helpful. People pointed out stuff that I hadn't thought of on my own and I really appreciate that.
3) As far as implementing these suggestions, I did okay. I tried an example, and I tried to show my passion, but my hook is still pretty weak, so any help on that would be appreciated . I plan to work on the hook more. I also want to try to add some statistics to help pitch my idea. Overall, I tried to be more relaxed and I feel like I achieved that this round.
Anyways, hope you enjoy!
I think you could go into some more stats dont be restricted too much to the 1 minute you can go to a minute 30 and get everything you want into it. Check my pitch out http://entgarrett.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2-talking-into-camera.html
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ReplyDeleteI like the enthusiasm you showed in your pitch. Its nice to have an idea for a product that you could actually use or wish existed because it makes you moe attached to the project. The best advice I can give after hearing your pitch and thinking if your idea is to differentiate your product in a way that makes it something entirely new and useful. This first thing I thought of when I heard your pitch was Tupperware or plastic bag. From your pitch I could not think of a difference between your idea and those two things. So differentiating and showing in words how your product is totally different would help. Check out my pitch here:http://thomasmurphy-ent3003.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Hi Courtney, I think that you have a very good idea and that you described the usefulness of your product very efficiently. My only suggestion is that you find a way to make your product more appealing to individuals that aren't super in to swimming a lot. Perhaps you could design the snack pack in a way that makes it look more stylish than other similar types of snack pouches. However, overall, I think your idea is very innovative and promising. Here's a link to my blog post so that you can check out my elevator pitch.
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